I Love Him
(Upon Reading A Writing On The Wall)I went to town, this Saturday, to seeAnd get the message written on a wallIn big and wide white strokes, a wake-up callAs sickening and solemn as can be.No way to...
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This is too strongly conceived to let a few puzzlements stand in the way. Along the way, a few of the idioms seem strained: "to see and get" [how about "to see the longed-for message written on the...
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Thank you, Mr Stokes. I corrected 'greetings card' (no plural now of 'greeting').Regarding 'in fall of life': is the omission of the definite article in this case really THAT impossible in poetry?...
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Dutch,I like this one better than the first one I commented on. I've read it at least 6 times now and it keeps getting better.Three thoughts:One: I hate to say this but...I agree with Frank on:...
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To Mr Stokes and Melissa Howards:I rewrote Lines 6 & 7. My 'fall of life' is now completely out of the way, thank God.I think my poem's doing well after this surgical intervention.'--call' occurs...
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